> This book is about family. The main character is a little girl who hates her family. She doesn't have a father. and she thought her family always told her what to do. but one morning she was kidnapped by someone. she was inside of the earth. And then she learned respect to family and she got respect from family around the world.

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This book is about family. 

This sentence is correct. 

The main character is a little girl who hates her family. 

This sentence is correct. 

She doesn't have a father and she thought her family always told her what to do but one morning she was kidnapped by someone.

You don't need a period in the sentence because it describes a series of connected thoughts or events, so using "and" and "but" helps keep them together smoothly.

she was inside of the earth.
She was inside of the earth.

"She" is capitalized at the beginning of the sentence because that's the standard rule in English: we start sentences with a capital letter.

 And then she learned respect to family and she got respect from family around the world.

 Then she earned respect from her family, and she got respect from families around the world.

We changed "to" to "from her" to specify that the respect came from her family, making the sentence clearer. Omitting the word "And" in the second sentence avoids repetition and maintains a smooth flow by using a comma and "and" to link related actions.