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Today, many people make pictures. We call these people painters.

Some people carve things out of wood or stone. We call them sculptors.

Some people make songs. We call them composers or songwriters.

Some people write stories. We call them authors.

All over the would, people have learned to use art and music and writing

to show some of the things they feel. It's like caveman.

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Correction:  Student's sentence   Corrected sentence        Grammar explanation       Better sentence  


Today, many people make pictures.

Today, many people take pictures.

We say "take pictures" because it's the common way to describe the action of capturing photos with a camera or phone. "Make pictures" would sound unusual because it suggests physically creating images, not just capturing them.

We call these people painters.

This sentence is correct.


Some people carve things out of wood or stone.

This sentence is correct.


We call them sculptors.

This sentence is correct.


Some people make songs.

This sentence is correct.


We call them composers or songwriters.

This sentence is correct.


Some people write stories.

This sentence is correct.


We call them authors.

This sentence is correct.


All over the would, people have learned to use art and music and writing to show some of the things they feel.

All over the world, people have learned to use art music, and writing to show some of the things they feel.

Changing "would" to "world" is a correction of a typographical error. Erasing the first "and" improves sentence flow, and the comma before the second "and" is the Oxford comma, used to clarify items in a list.


It's like caveman.

It's like a caveman.

We need to put "a" before "caveman" to show that we are referring to a specific or any one caveman, making the sentence grammatically correct and clear.







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